So we are writing about the happier short film so there are two main character in the film so it is the girl and the dog. So we have to choose one of the main character so I choose the girl.
It was my birthday and I was sitting on a chair at the dining table and there was tears coming out of my eyes. There was kids running around the dining room with a ballon and blowing the ballon also shouting screaming. Then finally my mom put down the cake in front of me at the table and I was ready to make my wish for my birthday but suddenly a girl was running to me and I was ready to blow the candle on my cake and the girl has blown it before me. Then I look at her in a seconds then suddenly tears were coming out from my eyes and wiping it with my hand. But then I so my dad giving me a present in front of me and also stop crying then I opened the present and I so a yellow ribbon inside the box.
Suddenly my dad was carrying a dog and I was so shocked and got excited to touch it it was so fluffy when I look at it and also colour white it was like a teddy bear. Then I have at the dog then my dad was coming to me then he gave the dog to me and it was so so fluffy then it started leaking me in my face several times. Then I put the yellow ribbon around its neck and my dad was trying to get as a photo then my dad puts the picture of me and my dog on the top of the shelf. My dad also measures out height both of us me and my dog as we grow up together and get older and then when I was in high school and we were picking teams for soccer and no one had pick me in a team. After that we were playing soccer then after playing soccer they took a photo of us a team and I was in the middle but some body push me out and I was in the side. Then the camera man said smile then when we all smiled they all look at me and they so my brace and then the laugh at me and I ran into the house with tears.
When I got home I lay down on the coach and crying so loud then my dog came then I went to play with it and it just lay down on the ground. Then I kept trying to play with him but my dog did not want to play. Then after a day my do was just laying down on the ground and not standing up it was unhappy and so weak then I just cried then I shout dad help because my dog was very sick then my dad carried my dog then we take him down into the hospital. Then we put him on the bed then I sat down with my dog then I path him on the head to keep him calm. Then my dad came into the door and said there is no way we could save your dog and I was crying and my face was full of tears of sadness. Then I took the yellow ribbon out of his neck.
20 years later when I was old I had a daughter and it was her birthday and the same thing happen to her like mine when I was a little kid. Then her dad give her a red ribbon and I was shook then I saw that my daughters dad got a puppy like mine when I was a little kid to. Then I smiled then my daughter was happy that she has a puppy and also fluffy. Then I got a tears coming out of my eyes it also took a photo of my son whit her dog and her.
Beautiful and descriptive writing, Joshua! You wrote a lot based on the music video. Make sure that all of your paragraphs are clearly indicated and spaced out properly. I think you had some really descriptive sentences and I could imagine exactly what you were writing about.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on this blogging task.
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